Shane Houghton blogs about stuff you probably already know about. He also writes comic books and cartoons. He is currently a staff writer at Nickelodeon on the animated show, BAD SEEDS.
iamanmoe said: Thanks for the explanation I've been stuck on that for a while
*winks, throws down smoke bomb, and disappears*
iamanmoe said: Did you just call Mabel and dipper "fictional"
I’m contractually obligated to state that Dipper and Mabel are “fictional characters from the TV show Gravity Falls” to further perpetuate the myth of whether or not they actually exist.
Wife: I need to go to the store to get toilet paper or we’ll starve!
Me: Are we eating toilet paper now? Do we use food to wipe?
Me: What’s the best food to wipe with? Lettuce?
Wife: Banana peel?
Me: What’s the WORST food to wipe with?
From Script to Final Page - Adventure Time
PAGE 4 - Six Panels
Later, we see one ENORMOUS VIOLET fish sitting lazily out of the water. It’s really gross and violent-looking, but right now, it is just lying there, crushing some nearby trees. Finn and Jake are very small in this panel.
FINN: I caught the biggest fish in the pond! That fat baby is mine!
JAKE: I can’t believe all those fish would just keep eating each other. Fish are weird.
Finn crosses his arms and looks accomplished. Jake hangs his head in defeat.
FINN: I win, dude.
Suddenly, the enormous fish ROOOAAAARS! Spit and little chucks of fish fly out of his fanged fish mouth.
ENORMOUS FISH: ROOOAAAAAR!
The enormous fish waddles over a nearby hut. Literally OVER it and crushes it. A couple of members of the Candy Kingdom run out in terror.
CITIZEN: I’m like, so afraid of fish!
Finn and Jake stand in the foreground, but we see their backs as they look out at the enormous fish. It’s heading towards the Candy Kingdom and crushing everything in its path.
JAKE: That’s your fish on its way to destroy the Candy Kingdom, bro.
FINN: No way, father in Spanish*!
CAPTION: * Padré, for all you non-spanish speakers.
Finn and Jake leap through the air in a heroic awesome jump. Finn has his sword drawn and Jake has big pummeling fists. The enormous fish is in the foreground with his mouth open. Jake notices the open mouth and looks afraid.
FINN: Fish Finishing Finalé!
JAKE: Watch out for his mouth!
PAGE 5 - Splash Page
This is like an x-ray vision page, or like we cut all the fish in half and can see inside them all— each fish that was previously eaten by the respective bigger fish. Basically, as Finn and Jake are eaten by each fish, we see they are then eaten by another, and another, and so on. So when they land, they are in a fish, inside a fish, inside a fish… and so on.
So they’ll start at the top, the enormous fish gulping them down. They tumble and fall as they are seen inside the next fish and then the next. There will be multiple Finn and Jakes on the page as the reader reads from the top down.
At the very bottom of the page, Finn and Jake lay crammed in the second to last fish (orange human-sized). The actual smallest red fish (Jake head-sized) is pinned against them inside that fish. They’re too big to be eaten by that small fish.
FINN: Fishing is so overrated.
JAKE: It smells like butterscotch in here.
SMALL RED FISH (really tiny lettering): Can’t I be eaten in peace?
The Changes: Chris suggested a “calm before the storm” panel on page 4 and added a couple great lines for Jake. Adding that calm beat before the big attack took up the room I had planned for the original sixth panel, so some of the action/dialogue was bumped to page five.
When visually realizing a script, sometimes the pacing doesn’t work as well as you thought it did when you wrote it. Chris is an excellent visual storyteller and has a keen sense about when and how to shift, trim, or lengthen a beat to better help tell the story.
Listening to your artist’s suggestions and truly collaborating with them helps tell the best story possible and makes you both look good.
If you’re interested in reading the full story, check out the digital version at comixology!